Family life Aphorism #218

Children's Lake,  Boiling Springs, Pennsylvania

Children’s Lake, Boiling Springs, Pennsylvania

“In family life, love is the oil that eases friction, the cement that binds closer together, and the music that brings harmony.”

FRIEDRICH NIETZSCHE

Photo comment: 

I am planning to add a comment or critique to some of my shots in the future. The following comment is the first one in a series. Please, feel free to contribute with your own remarks. A dialogue would certainly be most helpful to reinforce the visual storytelling.

Walking last Saturday morning around Children’s Lake in Boiling Spring, Pennsylvania I had seen this harmonious and lovely scene. The joy and the peace of the scene resonated with me immediately and I wanted to save it for memory.

The main subject is obviously the family feeding the birds. The group of people is placed accordingly to the rule of thirds and on the left side corresponding to Western visual tradition. The action is the feeding itself. The family is naturally engaged and is relaxed not knowing about being photographed. The birds gather around to pick up pieces of bread thrown at them. The willow arching above them unites the composition well and keeps the viewer’s eye in focus. The early morning light illuminates the picture with golden light and enhances the peaceful and serene atmosphere.

In summary, this is an everyday happy scene of quality family time.

Critique by Zane Paxton:

It’s a very interesting and engaging image on the whole. It is interesting how strongly people satisfy the role of primary subject isn’t it? It’s essentially automatic for us to nominate then accept people as being the de-facto primary subjects. There are a lot of rich RELATIONSHIP going on here which is a real plus; the more the better because it adds richness and nuance to a visual story. I’m pulled into this image.

  1. The people have a relationship to the birds, the pond and the place which defines WHAT they are doing here.
  2. The pond has a relationship to the land and defines a very interesting and unique SENSE OF PLACE. This feels like New England/East Coast so it getting descriptive.
  3. The nature of the place defines the season and gives us a sense of what it is like to be there which is compelling.
  4. The birds have a relationship to the pond, the people and the place.

About the only nit is that it can be slightly distracting when objects like the birds are intersecting the frame (our eye is drawn to such intersections). I might try editing out the partial birds along the bottom edge of the frame.

Thank you Zane for your detailed critique.

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